Please read and edit my attached paper. The file called ‘paper draft’. I have also attached my professors and colleagues with editing suggestions. If you could really change this paper up and improve my conclusion and analysis section it would be very helpful. Please don’t change the Citation format. Its supposed to be APSA and that is not available on this weebsite. I have also attached a copy of a colleagues paper. They did a good job at the conclusion and findings analysis. Could you take a look? I do like my introduction, so I don’t want it to be completely rewritten. Just edited and adjusted, if some parts need to go to the conclusion that’s fine. I do however want the Conclusion and Research analysis to be rewritten and edited. If you add 5 pages for the conclusion and result in analysis that would be great .
